- You'll start by re-reading the paragraph as instructed (your student already read this aloud to you).
- You and your student will agree on five important words and write them as "notes." Once we agreed, I used dictation as the tool for her to enter them in her Apprentice's Manual.
- Have your student orally offer a sentence of their own from those notes.
- You now have 2 options:
- write their original sentences on the board, or
- write the paragraph as written in the book on the board (you may type this, too and double space so you have room to add your changes).
He pretended he was a big, pompous man followed by a black cat and a slave pushing a wheelbarrow. he was striding from market stall to market stall, tasting little samples of butter and cheese, then stopping to let the black cat lick his fingers. When his half-boots came untied, the slave had to kneel down and tie them. No matter what went wrong, the slave had to fix it. A t last he bought some huge turtles and lobsters, a firkin of butter and cheese, a suckling pig, a gammon of bacon, a skipple of salt, and led the way home, his nose in the air.5. Using knowledge or the thesaurus, look up and choose the best synonym for each underlined word or phrase. This is a great exercise in precision vocabulary. Encourage your children to say exactly what they mean. It's a valuable skill. As you decide on the changes, cross out the underlined word and write your selections above.
6. Now go back through and add any descriptive words necessary to improve understanding and quality of the paragraph. It's a great time to encourage exact descriptions, too.
Here is the finished product of Darling yet Diva's paragraph
He pretended he was a big, proud man followed by a black feline and a bondman pushing a wheelbarrow. He was walking throughout the city square, sampling creamy butter and various cheeses, then stopping to let the black cat lick his fingers. When his boots came unstrapped, the captive had to bend down and string them. No matter what the error, the slave had to correct it. At last he bought some huge turtles and crustaceans, a firkin of butter and cheese, a young and tender pig, a whole side of bacon, two and one half pounds of salt, and led the way home, his nose in the air.7. Now finish your assignment via copy work or dictation. We chose copy work on that day b/c I knew there would be plenty of dictation in tomorrow's assignment.