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Tuesday, September 28, 2010

Write Shop Sample for those whom requested more :)

by my 7th grader, Lil' Mother, these samples are lessons 9 & 10. Each lesson has specific requirements of what the student must include. Of my older students, she has had to work the hardest at writing. For elementary school, we focused on outlining, paragraph formation andinformative papers (at least 5 paragraphs). Write Shop has allowed us to work on different genres and develop her own personal style.

Lesson 9:
1st 2 sentences follow the "question-answer" format; no more than 2 be verbs; begin 1 sentence w/ paired adj; begin 1 sentence w/ a present -ing participial phrase

Spotted Sensation
What mammal runs like a speeding vehicle? This large dog like animal in size and build is a cheetah. The cheetah, also known as the hunting leopard and found in the savannas of Africa and India, occupies from fourteen square miles to 322 square miles, depending on gender. Purring and hissing, these carnivores also growl, whine, and make bird-like calls to communicate with other cheetahs. For speed Acinonyx jubatus’ claws are non-retractable and for antiglare, they have black tears all the way down to the mouth; both characteristics make them run faster and more agile. Sprinting after their prey, these solitary, black-spotted animals use their long, flexible bodies to bend leading to faster strides. Running approximately sixty to seventy miles per hour, cheetahs become a sensational spectacle to all.

Lesson 10: Writing a Concise Biography
no more than 1 be verb; begin 1 sentence w/ paired adj., a present participle; used an appositive in the topic sentence; begin closing sent. w/ an 'ly adverb; only allowed 5 sentences

The Great Emancipator
            Born in Kentucky, Abraham Lincoln received little education, only reading and writing, but his determined mind persuaded him to develop skills and grow into a self-taught lawyer, in the great state of Illinois. Rising up in politics, Abe matured into the sixteenth President of the United States in the 1860 election. Honest and humble, Lincoln gained an enormous amount of fame in history, especially because of the Civil War, signing the Emancipation Proclamation, Gettysburg Address, and becoming the first Republican President. The Railsplitter overcame quantities of harsh words from the South during the Civil War, and also avoided assassination several times. Sadly, this inspiration eventually failed to escape and in 1865 was assassinated at a celebration honoring the Civil War’s end.

1 comment:

Dee said...

Tina, I'm so impressed with Lil' Mother's work! I definitely plan to look closer at Write Shop in the future.

I wish I would have done this with Adam in the 7th and 8th grades. I think I will start it with Josh in the 6th grade once he knows how to outline.

Thanks for putting up her work!


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